BOTTLED UP.
Have you ever felt like no one listens to you, or you feel like you have to keep things like your emotions bottled up inside because no one will understand? Well, this is a story of a beautiful young girl who has some problems and doubts in life but doesn’t know what to do.
“HEY MOVE OUT OF MY WAY!.”
“Sorry.”
“UGH I DON’T WANT YOUR SORRY, I WANT THIS HOMEWORK DONE ASAP!.”
Somethings just don’t go your way I guess. She was struggling at home and at school. She had friends but she still felt like things were hard. When she got home that night she saw her stepfather beating her mother. It was a horrible sight. But what could she do, she was just a 13-year-old girl. So she quickly shuffled into her room without being noticed.
As she sat there she thought about her life, what’s happening around her and is it healthy for her. Her emotions took hold of her that night and she cried herself to sleep.
The next morning she lay in bed, blankets over her face and huddled up in a ball. As she left the house, her back slumped and head hung like a rope that had just fallen. She made her way to school. She sat down in class and started to work. She had not got enough sleep that night, due to the shouting. So she was finding it very hard to concentrate.
During recess she was having a fun time with her friends, forgetting about everything that had gone on last night. Until her bully came. She just ignored her, that was harder than she thought. A few seconds later she was pulled down from the monkey bars and had twisted her wrist. She got up tears sprung from her eyes but she didn’t cry, she just walked away like nothing had happened.
When she got home she put a bandage around her wrist to keep it secure. She wanted to just get a good night sleep, she knew that was impossible. She kept thinking about her bully, her mum and how everything was horrible in life. She needed a way to get out but she didn’t know how. She needed to tell someone.
“AHH!”
It was her mother's scream she knew she had to do something now because her mother couldn’t do anything, she was becoming too weak she could barely get up. So she made up her mind, she wanted to live a normal life with no problems and no more hurting.
When she woke up the next morning, she ran straight out of the house and sprinted to school. She got one of her best friends to come with her and she had a talk with the principal. She told them everything: like why she was failing in her classes, why she has no energy to do things and what was going on at home.
The principal was shocked to hear that she had been getting bullied and that she didn’t even feel safe at home, the principal knew that something had to be done. So she had a talk with the bully and asked her why she was doing this. The bully just said,
“Because it’s the only way I feel like I have power.”
The principal told her many other ways that she could feel powerful without getting the wrong attention, the bullying stopped happening. But there was still one more problem. The school contacted the police and the girl got questioned. She thought it was unnecessary because she just wanted them to go to the house and take him away, never be seen again, but that’s not how it works.
After about 3 weeks, she started to feel what she wanted to feel from the start. Happiness. She had a fresh start, no bullying, no home problems. She felt safe, secure and most of all happy.
By the way, bullying is not ok. Because the girl you call fat - is starving herself and has lost 30lbs. The boy you just called stupid - he has a learning disability and studies for over 4 hrs a night. The girl you called ugly - she spends hours putting on makeup so people will like her. The boy you just tripped - he’s abused enough at home. That old man you called ugly because of his scars - he fought for our country.
There’s a lot more to people than you think.
So please next time you see someone don’t judge them until you actually know them.
Eva’s Reflection.
I think I was good at taking the opportunity and doing my E-asttle based around something I know lots about (me). I think that it helped me a lot because I knew how that girl felt. So it made it a lot easier for me to imagine myself as the character.
I think I need to work on my punctuation for e.g, putting the last speech mark after the full stop not before. Also trying to add in more breaks for the reader so they’re not out of breath.
Other than that I think it was a pretty good piece of writing.